Sept. 6, 2017 - Curse - page 9 (revised)

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KIELA: I wouldn't, if I were you, unless you want glowing bowels tomorrow morning.

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TOR: So... back to town?
KIELA: Isn't the Sheriff waiting for you there?
TOR: Umm... there *are* other towns, right?

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KIELA: I wonder...

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KIELA: Breakfast.

24 comments

Jan

Here's our revised page. If you missed it, pages 11-3, 11-4, 11-5, and 11-6 were also revised.

Navarre • 09/06/2017

Love Bapple and Silver's reaction to the mere whisper of Breakfast. Does this new direction mean we can flush all the poop jokes?

Aulderbane • 09/06/2017

...was the NSFW notice because of the mention of bowels? I didn't notice anything else. O.o

jprime • 09/06/2017

@Navarre The Reaction is all Silver's; Bapple's just watching.

@Jan Does the "Production Difficulties" page still need to be up?

Michael • 09/06/2017

What? No bullshit anymore?

Bruce B. • 09/06/2017

The Bullshite strips have been Retconned and can be saved for later use, "As they are strong and will promote growth..." (10 Internets.)

Jan • 09/07/2017

@Navarre @Michael The poop jokes stunk. So they've been flushed :P

@Aulderbane Whoops, I forgot to remove the warning XD

@jprime I suppose not. I can move its announcement to the front page.

Yht • 09/07/2017

Yap, a rabbit with cat paws is newer a good signal.

Karou • 09/07/2017

And Tor's like 'Exit, Stage Left Even' at Silver's actions. ^_^

Panther • 09/07/2017

How to help a tiger to be a fast runner XD

Shockwave07 • 09/07/2017

I'll miss the old strips, but hey we need to get on with the story! And one rabid from hunger Silver seems to be the ticket!

CyberDragon • 09/08/2017

I'm glad you removed the poop jokes. They... were pretty crappy.

i'm sorry...

Ephesus • 09/08/2017

I'm getting more and more confused by the day about this.

For one, I still don't see how you couldn't have simply skipped ahead to the time of their arrival. They always could've "borrowed" a cart there, or Kiela could've done some fortune-telling to make money for a new one. Second, I'm sure Tor was already gonna pull the cart, so why the "incentive"?

Sorry if this sounds whiny, because I'm really not mad, simply confused beyond recognition. Like I said, neither of those things were really a problem in the first place.

Jan • 09/09/2017

@Ephesus What you're seeing is me being unhappy with an idea and trying to fix it. It's still a learning process after all these years. There are places in the story where I can skip ahead, but that leaves hanging threads, and I felt this is not one of those places.

Unfortunately, this chapter is not one where I had written the whole arc in advance, due to a severe shortage of time. I know there are specific story points to hit, but it's playing connect-the-dots that you sometimes end up with a left-handed banana instead of a right-handed one.

I know I've inevitably caused confusion and some readers will prefer the old gags better than the new ones, and vice versa. At the end of the day, I'm trying my best to create something that I'm personally satisfied with.

Panther • 09/09/2017

Kiela can say "breakfast" to Silver's ear , or "giant carp behind you" to Tor's one XD

WB101 • 09/09/2017

Do what you have to do to keep the characters from hijacking YOUR story Jan... and hopefully you won’t end up kidnapped by one of them, locked in a closet, and ghostwriting an arc for them while being fed graham crackers slipped under the door (long story... don’t ask). In the meantime, we’ll just hang on and enjoy the ride.

Although... I think Dawn the DrMooID kinda liked buffalo-guy, even if he did have a bit of a potty-mouth. :D

By the way, panel 2, the cart’s wheel (the one closest to Tor) looks square. Guess Wolf has been at work again. Also, I’m sure Tor is exceeding the recommended axel tolerance a wee bit (though a ravenous Silver is a very good excuse)...

portals awaaaaay

Shockwave07 • 09/10/2017

Wait... Is Silver checking how her shirt is fitting?

Matt • 09/10/2017

If Tor kills the rabbit will it also kill the king since it (the rabbit) procced

hariman • 09/12/2017

WB101: On the subject of characters taking over a story, Ursula Vernon of Digger fame (among other comics), stated that while she argued with most of her characters at one point or another, she never won against Boneclaw Mother. Look up her comic Digger to find out why! ;D

Ephesus • 09/12/2017

Jan, your banana analogy makes it sound like the two situations are literally identical XD But, I hear what you're saying. You do you~

WB101, I like long stories... -3-

Silverwolf • 09/12/2017

@Jan: I'm sure we could dump the toilet humor and just plunge into the story.

E.Mousie • 09/13/2017

@Jan, go for it, we'll all just muddle along

AlyxVixen • 09/24/2017

Panel 5, me without coffee... (and I mean in Silver's place)

drivernjax • 09/24/2017

Wow! 0 to Mach 1 in .001 seconds. LOL.

eric bloedow • 10/26/2017

"glowing bowels" made me think of a page in "goblinscomic.com" where someone said that eating too much of some kind of glowing fungus would "make your poop glow". (warning: that comic is VERY violent!)

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